I've revised the last post's poem. I wrote at the time it didn't feel complete, not sure it is now but I think it's better.
all new borns have this old soul stare
as if they’ve not quite got used to being back in the flesh
or just where they’ve ended up this time
they look into our eyes and speak to us
so you made it here first this time
that’s a turn up for the books
no word of a lie
this place is a bit rum
but let’s make the best of it eh
and usually we do
I wanted to expand on the voice and I also thought that I took too much time getting to the gist. My aim is always to be as concise as possible. I also think that too much frame around the poem detracts from its impact. You need to interrogate every word, does it really need to be present? What does it bring? Does the poem work without it?
I got a copy of the new Palooka 5 album Alien Grace this week, it's excellent. Rumour has it there is an ep in the can ready for an autumn release! The band goes from strength to strength! Here's the title song.
Until next time.
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