Spacing is important, it effects how people perceive a poem. Some poems can look too compact, at other times, too much air and the poem can appear slight. The previous version of this poem was probably too squat. You can read it here.
SALT
They found it where
he said they would
A day’s digging in the field
dirty brown crystals
It was, he maintained
proof there had been an ocean above our heads
To begin with it was whispered
he had placed it there himself
but as the seam expanded
and gave up pound after pounds worth of profit
They accepted it was natural
though none would go as far as to agree
this land had once been the sea bed
He claimed we limit ourselves
settle for the least we can
In the spring he left for who knows where
The men shrugged
content to hollow the earth for coin.
Thanks must again ago to the Secret Poets for their invaluable perspectives. I'm still not sure that the poem is in its final form but it's getting there.
Until next time.
