HOW TO STAND

I was looking at a poem I had thought finished when I realised it still needed work. You can read the last version here. I then discussed it with a friend and concluded it really needed alterations.

YOU PLAY THE HAND YOU’RE GIVEN 1

Tallinn Old Town – Friday afternoon

What catches your attention

as you turn a corner

is the woman with the camera

chivvying the others into shapes

she sees on a screen in her head

It’s only then you notice the Bride

in ivory silk with a bouquet to match

being told where to stand

how to pose

who to look at

when to smile

and you wish her

against all the odds

a happy life

I've removed the word bossy as it was not needed, too much tell, not enough show. I felt I'd missed a trick by not using how, why, what and when. Also my friend suggested a triptych - watch this space. 

Archie Fisher died last week. He was a folk singer I'd liked since the early 70s. Here's the song that introduced me to his work.

Lo Borges also checked out of planet earth as well. I adored his work with Milton Nascimento on Clube de Esquina. This is Tudo O Que Você Podia Ser

Until next time.