"Obs" is an abbreviation of observation. On certain hospital wards some patients may have 1:1 staffing due to concern that the patient may self-harm.
I think that is all the introduction needed for this poem:
Here's Les Illes by Maria Del Mar Bonet. Enjoy.
I think that is all the introduction needed for this poem:
First Day on Obs.
She
would have if she could.
The
other nods, exhales grey clouds.
They
sit in the garden area, inside a hexagonal, perspex cabin.
Their
air is thick, and heavy and obscures them.
She
had planned on not being here today.
Things
hadn't turned out as she wanted,
pulled
back to this ward, to this world.
She
is still here, the other nods.
The
ember reaches the once white filter.
A
last suck on nothing.
She
discards it in the concrete, plant pot ashtray.
She
will sleep through the television afternoon.
This poem has been through a number of revisions and has been totally restructured. In the process it has become shorter and I hope more atmospheric. Thanks to both the Secret Poets and Juncture 25 for their constructive feedback. If we are to grow as writers we need to share our work with others and listen to what is said.Here's Les Illes by Maria Del Mar Bonet. Enjoy.
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