As usual no correlation between images and words. I think this is the house style of this blog.
I was talking to my mother in law the other day and she happened to mention that her daffodils had been tightly closed first thing that morning and over the day they had opened without her seeing them do so. This set me off thinking.
First
Daffodils
sun
tipped spears
hold
a miser's delight
and
over a day
in
slow motion
they
cash in their gold
to
shower the room
with
the promise of summer
First
Daffodils
sun
tipped spears
hold
a miser's delight
and
over a day's slow motion
-less when you look
they open
cash in their gold
to
shower the room
with
the promise of summer to come
As you can see I have removed the last 2 words. I believe the poem reads the same whether they are present or not. So out they went. I also removed the play on words around slow motion/less. I liked it but I felt it confused the flow of the poem. Most of the time less is more.
I leave you with Anna Terheim live last month.
Until the next time.
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