Another revised poem.
You can read the last version here.
After The Pilgrimage
finally the fire caught
aided in no small part
by the razor wind
that cut across the beach
we watched the clothes we had worn
all those long miles to Santiago burn
then looking beyond the sea
to where our former lives waited
no one spokeDiscussing the poem with the Secret Poets, they felt that the poem was more understandable once you knew that the narrator had been on a pilgrimage to Santiago.
As we discussed the poem it became clear that the penultimate line was unnecessary. Small changes but hopefully they increase understanding.The talented Annabelle Chvostek has just released a third single to herald her new album.Until next time.