Friday, 20 July 2012
BRISTOL IN THE RAIN
I am cobbling this post together before I drive up to Leeds, a five hour drive on a Friday, for my brother's 60th birthday party. Sixty years on this earth, amazing. Though the nearer I get the younger I think sixty is.
It was my birthday the other day and my daughter came to Bristol with me for the day. We were looking forward to a Lebanese meal, both being big fans of middle eastern cuisine. As we neared the restaurant it began to rain (hence the mangling of the Al Stewart song for this week's title), and when we found that they had closed for good it began to rain, stair-rods, as they say. During the day I kept writing haikus in my head and scribbling them down when I had the opportunity (-yes I am fun to go out with! It's a good discipline to get in to, try it sometime.)
Anyway here are my humble attempts to describe a day.
Daughter texts her friends,
I look out at flat, wet Levels,
Water logged July.
Fleetingly Bridgwater,
We leave known landmarks behind,
Bristol approaches.
Sign says "Ceased trading."
Lebanese restaurant shut,
Heavy rain now falls.
Broadmead in the rain,
A vast expanse of concrete,
There is no shelter.
Lazy meal, much talk,
Day rescued from disaster,
Sun creeps out of clouds.
Sudden platform change,
Moving people mob the stairs,
Crowded train no seats.
Why not write a haiku yourself? Have a good weekend.
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Interesting haiku! I love how they're short depictions of just one or two moments in time.
ReplyDeleteA happy belated birthday, Paul! :)
ReplyDeletehappy, happy birthday! writing haiku sounds like a very cool way to have celebrated it.
ReplyDeleteFleetingly Bridgewater - now that will always stay with me. It's Betjemanesque. Happy Birthday and when you get there 60 is no kind of milestone believe me.
ReplyDeleteGolden eagle: Thank you, I think that's why haiku's work so well.
ReplyDeleteDavid: thank you, i had a lovely day.
Aguilar: Thank you. It was a cool day.
Oscar: Thank you. The line came before the rest of the haiku. I'm not far off it now myself.
Modern haiku:
ReplyDeleteinter-city train journey -
a rattling window top
shuts itself
(Leaving Temple Meads train station, Bristol)
train judder
sunlight on every ripple
of the river
(Train from Bradford on Avon)
winter timetable-
the late train leaves behind
half a school trip
(Bradford on Avon train station)
dark morning...
the sushi bar opens up
for the train station
(Bath Spa train station/Dashi Sushi bar)
coolness of spring rain
waiting with the bus queue
on newly cut hair
(Whitetree Roundabout bus stop, Bristol Downs)
Publication: Mainichi Shimbun, Japan
rain clouds
conversations shift around
the train carriage
Publications credits: Mainichi Shimbun (2011)
Award Credits: Honourable Mention Best of Mainichi 2011
Ah, rain and trains, very British, very Bristol too.
From Alan Summers, a Bristol-bred haiku poet. :-)
Hi Alan, thanks for the comment. Your Haikus are excellent.
DeleteThanks Paul for liking my haiku.
ReplyDeleteAlan, With Words
http://www.withwords.org.uk/what.html